9 thoughts on “Denied

  1. Cara Hartley

    I hear you! That’s the very way I feel about desire. Too messy and too awful. Never again.
    The image paired with this poem is beautiful!

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  2. msjadeli

    tricky to condense using 11 words. beautifully accomplished. and yes, the painting really pulls me in and gets my imagination going in combination with the poem!

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  3. Spiral Artist

    I had never read an elevenie before, and reading this, I feel like I should try it sometime. As for this particular one, it may be short, but boy does it devastate.

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    1. Angela van Son Post author

      Thank you! I can’t do haikus, because I don’t understand the English rules for syllables. So when once upon a time, during one of the Poetry Writing Months, I found out about the elevenie I was thrilled. Finally a short form I’m able to do. I like how they invite me to make snapshots of a moment. Something that happens, something I’m thinking. You get the core and nothing more.

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      1. Spiral Artist

        I usually use a syllable counter (there are many of those online) for haikus… even though they mostly tell you that you’re off by a single syllable…

        Back to the point: the format is very, very interesting and you use it to great impact.

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