Leave me this way

He’s late again
My imaginary friend
Sitting on a park bench
Waiting for the sun
I wonder why the clouds
Never leave me this way

Being late is his way
Of showing me, again and again
I needn’t be worried by clouds
Each one an imaginary friend
Never blocking the sun
Just aiming for this bench

They are drawn to this bench
Because in their peculiar way
They consider me their sun
And when I escape (again)
Tears, because their friend
Is lost without her clouds

I wonder why the clouds
Don’t just sit on the park bench
Talk to my imaginary friend
Explain that this way, his way
Is not helping me – again
I am waiting for the sun

I doubt if the sun
Hides behind the clouds
On purpose – again
Scared of the park bench
Searching for a way
To connect with my imaginary friend

Not realising my friend
Will never wait for the sun
Will always leave me this way
He befriended the clouds
One time, on a park bench
When I was late again

He’s late again, my imaginary friend
I’m waiting on a park bench, sitting in the sun
I’ve told the clouds to leave me alone today

I’m so excited I tried my hand at a #sestina! It fits today’s prompt I believe, in being inspired by art. When the first song line entered my mind (waiting for the sun, Jethro Tull) several other ones popped up later – my brain works like that. I’ve included all of them I think.

Their are more poems inspired by art or artists on my blog, either music or visual arts. I’ll see if I can find them and link them to this post. I know if you click on ‘song’ in the tag cloud, you can find a number of them.

For perfectionists: I changed the last word of the poem on purpose, outside the rules for a sestina. Poetic liberty 🙂

13 thoughts on “Leave me this way

  1. marialberg

    Very nice poem. I especially enjoyed the fourth stanza. I found my sestina very challenging but rewarding. Glad you enjoyed writing one, too. I love that you included the Jethro Tull inspiration. I’m afraid I related more to the “snot running down” line in the song. Glad that wasn’t your inspiration. 🙂

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    1. Angela van Son Post author

      Thank you! I have known the song for sooooo long, and never conciously heard the snot line before today. Weird. Apparently the song is about our awkward relation with homeless people.

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    1. Angela van Son Post author

      Thank you Esther! It is difficult indeed. I love to see what different people did with it. I also find I really need concentration to read all those 39 line poems. I’m planning to read them all though, it’s totally worth the effort.

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  2. heyannis

    Angela, great job on the sestina! I was drawn to the third stanza. And especially to this line:
    “Because in their peculiar way
    They consider me their sun”
    Thank you. xoA

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    1. Angela van Son Post author

      Thank you for sharing what you specifically liked Annis. Since it was quite an effort, I really longed for this poem to be read. I’m so happy people read it and appreciate it.

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    1. Angela van Son Post author

      Thank you! I love to hear what people like about it. I rarely write in a specific form, so this was a challenge. I think the #sestina was around in an earlier month. I vaguely remember trying it back then and giving up. I’m so happy I managed one this time.

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  3. Dawn D

    I don’t think I’m in the proper headspace to manage the sestina myself.
    I’m impressed with your achievement. This poem is perfect on so many ways. It speaks to me, and I didn’t even realise the form until I got to the third or fourth stanza, I was so drawn into the story.
    I too loved the third stanza. I liked that it gave us some introspection into the clouds point of view, not just the narrator. It’s always good to aim to understand more than one point of view to understand a scene, I find, so this one was really powerful.
    I noticed the last line… wondered about it, but agree that your line is perfect as it is, perfect for this poem… poetic licence from a great poet!

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