The sound of silence was ringing in my ears
drowning out all other noise
like the words you said
You did what? Say it again.
You did what?
Say it again.
You did…
oh, look at that cloud, it’s shaped like an apple tree,
the windfall apples scattered at its trunk,
the worms singing songs of decay,
reminding us of rotten leafs,
sugar turning into alcohol
What did you say again?
You did what?
I had only seen the preview of #OctPoWriMo day 5. Now I’ll go and read the prompt π It has something to do with autumn.
This reads like conversations between my husband and I, were I drift entirely too often. Lovely read.
In my household the man is the drifter π
I guess I read this as someone finding out bad news and the other person trying to hem and haw and not tell it.
I’ve not had very good luck with romance, which probably lends itself to my less hopeful interpretation of the poem. My teammates Sadie, Adam, and Aurora, who are all in happy relationships, might interpret things as Laura did!
http://poetryofthenetherworld.blogspot.com/2014/10/copyright-fergregory-123rf-stock-photo.html
Arghhhhhh π¦ I just anwered on the page of your poem Helena and managed to delete the whole comment. I’m too tired to click the right buttons it seems. I love “the final date”, that’s a great find, and it suits the poem really well. I love the originality of yours.
I like the sound of silence. Lovely poem! π
You are getting good. Keep going.
Thank you!
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the sound of silence – beautiful poem
Its fresh and young and not, like many wines, I cant figure why I like this one so much. Didnt understand enough, nor want to, its crisp and I wish I’d written this!
Thank you for your lovely, smile inducing comment! π
Angela,
I love this imagery!
oh, look at that cloud, itβs shaped like an apple tree,
the windfall apples scattered at its trunk,
the worms singing songs of decay,
reminding us of rotten leafs,
sugar turning into alcohol
Sorry I missed this one last week!
Stephen
β€ love that
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